Confession

You have a great idea going, and it flows quite well from beginning to end, starting small but vast and general, then ending big but in a small, concentrated point. The feeling of air gradually being sucked into a singularity in the lungs of the guilty is admirable.

The following are suggested revisions:

Verse 1: "That I obey the media like a go and society as a saint" should be rewritten to make it easy to read only once. I read it twice because I did a double take on the comparison. Who is the god, you or the media? While contextually obvious, it's easier for the reader to not break the flow of the poem by stopping and rereading if you used a metaphor instead of a simile here. I.E: "That I obey the media god and pray to the saint of society."

Your style jumps from artistic to vernacular from verse to verse, which is a little jarring sometimes. You use words like Saint and God and Walking Machine, idioms like "a thief and a scoundrel" in some verses. Then in others, you don't use imagery at all, especially where it might matter if you did. For instance the second to last verse --- "I confess that I'd do anything they'd allow ... Then for them to hate me" --- it has a lot less impact because the imagery in the other verses steals the attention away from the ending. Space out your imagery a little more strategically and the words will guide the reader's subconscious a little better.

I feel like some of the verses are a little redundant. In your style of poetry, less means more because the longer you read the piece, the more numb you become to the words as they strike you. You've counteracted this well by using your small-to-large and loose-to-dense approach but you can do even better by using greater word efficiency. Raise the content-to-wordcount ratio!