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They told me that God reigned high

And taught me his rules and story

So that on the day that I die

I could live up there in his glory



But I hear the voices all around

That what I learned was just a lie

No glory of God can be found

And my faith is bound to die



Now I've seen a mother's warmth to her son

Protecting him from all around

And men who live like we are one

Even though they sleep on the ground



I've seen people give all they have

So a stranger's life may be free

And if we all go down this path

Life is better, you will see



So if we all give into this love

And live life for all its worth

Then I don't need a god above         

Because his light is here on earth
A poem giving some of my opinions.
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely piece, i am an Atheist myself so i pretty much believe we are our own light, we don't need some invisible man above to tell us what to do. A man is a master of himself. :nod:

one little thing though, i believe you meant reigned not reined in the first verse 
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EricAMBM Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013   Writer
I did, thank you for the catch :)
And I am not sure if God exists or not, but I agree with most of that
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome :huggle:
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Smrgle Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
lovely :D 
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EricAMBM Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013   Writer
thank you :hug:
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BDancinJones Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It did seem religious at first, but based on some of your comments that wasn't the goal.  Noting that, my suggestion is to nix the word "But" from the beginning of the third stanza; that one word is what seems to set you in stark opposition to the comments of the second stanza, however if you leave it out, the stanza doesn't necessarily cast you on either side of the line of God Y/N.  That's my suggestion on how to approach that.
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EricAMBM Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013   Writer
thanks for the suggestion, I will think on it
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AndreaCCastaneda Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013
Im not a fan of religion but I like this talk!
great job !
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EricAMBM Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013   Writer
thank you! though I'm agnostic, that is sort of the point...
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ListentomeSCREAM Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I normally don't enjoy religious writings, but I  must say, this is really nice. Great job. I loved it.
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